Thanks everyone for the very helpful feedback. I’ve changed the tagline back to “something”, removed the words “with TiddlyWiki” and changed the background colour.
I think the “something” form has the strongest double meaning, and emphasises our most important distinction from conventional products like Roam, Obsidian, Notion: TiddlyWiki lets you build and share useful custom tools to work with your data.
While I think the banner itself looks better, I think there is an awkward transition from the banner to ordinary text, and particularly the bullet points. I have been experimenting with a bento box layout. Here’s an example from Apple:
My idea was to turn the bullet points and paragraphs of HelloThere into boxes within a bento layout. I’ve got as far as a very basic grid layout with some basic styling. First is the desktop layout, and then the mobile layout.
There is obviously a couple of gaps, and I also want to add some varied, appropriate images to go into some or all of the boxes to add visual interest.
While I was working on this I noticed that a few of the links in HelloThere should be updated. For example, “essay or novel” links to a very old TiddlyWiki edition that was wonderful at the time, but is now surely too old to be relevant to users coming to TiddlyWiki for the first time.
This is the sort of work where I would welcome assistance: anyone who can write good copy, or can design layouts, or compose pleasing colour schemes, or any of the other skills needed to make our front page as good as it can be.
In the meantime, I would welcome any feedback.